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I want to write a love poem,
but I only want to be in love
if I have someone there with me.

instead,
I romanticise the efforts
of pressing pen to paper,
painting pages personal
and colouring them
the same green as your eyes-

your eyes.
that's something that never
strikes me as common,
as something permanent
like concrete,
or a given
like a constant variable.

to wake up,
and see the lids like curtains,
thick and deep like night,
over them,
I feel like I am a film photograph.

and when they open,
sealed with sleep
and more honest than ever
before a single wall can be erected,
I see a poem
as I begin to swim,
and forever,
in place of writing it down,
I smile along with you
and we readjust
to be closer and enfolded
like paper cranes
in the other's arms,
and,
with a connection,
brief,
of lips and teeth,
we drift off again
to a sultry sleep.
i may be in a relationship now, but i'm not in love, not yet


I CAPITALISED MY I'S? WHY? (it seemed like the thing to do.)
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:iconcrackabone:
CrackABone Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:heart:
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
:glomp:
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CrackABone Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i want to fav everything you write, i think.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
you cray, gurl
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mouseluva Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Student General Artist
I love the description of eyes (: Maybe I'm a sucker for romanticising maths (though I'm not sure how on earth I could squeeze any of that out of it myself xD), but it's just perfect (:
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012
lol it feels so weird to be responding to comments on pieces about him now, he broke up with me like a week and a half ago but it led to better things i think, it's just odd! thank you, dear <3 and let me know about your boy!!
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mouseluva Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012  Student General Artist
I know that feeling. People often send sympathetic responses for things I wrote at a very different time in my life. I've had too much work to get through many of your deviations lately - I've got fourteen of them to read at some point xD
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Schizophrenematic Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012   Writer
Oh, that was just beautiful. I hope everything's going well with you and him. :)
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
thank you so much :]
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MadMonk7 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012
This flows well nice work
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012
thanks!
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RosesAndViolets Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Student General Artist
I know this feeling, and in the end I left him because of it.
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wh0rem0ans Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
I can never seem to let the I's be small. That means something, metaphysically, but one cup of tea will not open that door quite this early. :frail:
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
haha, and my refusal to capitalise probably means something too ;P
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:iconwh0rem0ans:
wh0rem0ans Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012
exactly :frail:
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Angelalala923 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Student Interface Designer
Love how the last couple lines rhyme[ish]
(: (:
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
thank you <3333
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:iconquenwrites:
QuenWrites Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love this. The first bit I can really relate to, and the whole thing is just so beautiful :heart:
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
thank you, dear!
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:iconquenwrites:
QuenWrites Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem :D
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akanekokoro Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012
that was incredible :D
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
thanks :D
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laney2899 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012  Student Writer
dude that was amazing. You did an amazing job on it!
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012
aw, thank you!
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laney2899 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Student Writer
np. ^^
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ooh, there's somthing so beautiful and unqiue about this poem. I love it so much <3
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
oh, thank you! <3
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:iconsummerday27:
summerday27 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome <3
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wongy06 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012
Because You finally realise how important You are. :)
(...Unconsciously.)
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012
lololol no not at all. it was for aesthetics this time :]
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:iconwongy06:
wongy06 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012
Well, it wouldn't be very aesthetic if there were no reason for it to belong there. :P
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012
yes it would..? haha aesthetics are just looks
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:iconwongy06:
wongy06 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012
Well, if you put a freezer randomly into one of your photographs, I don't think it would enhance the aesthetics. xD
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012
it depends on the rest of the photo!
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:iconwongy06:
wongy06 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012
Well, okay. :)
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Gratte-Ciel Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012   General Artist
beautiful poem, my darling. i'm just sad we haven't spoken in so long... ):
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
thank you, and me too <3
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