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between ribbons and bones by *ohsostarryeyed:iconohsostarryeyed:





saturated red-ribbon neck with
wavering wavelengths and
tremulous perches, your angry
bird heart peels my skin away
like it's been burnt.

hollow bones have forsaken you
again, tempting flight and
effecting fall. [flying is just
falling in reverse.]

chipper beaks and waterlogged
ears sink faster than stones.
not land, not air, not breathing,
not nothing.

[dear bird, do you hurt like me?]

skinned and sorrowed, broken songs
radiate from broken bones on a faulty radio.
a jump and fall,
insurmountable wall,
you're going nowhere.
you hit zero with the rest,
crash and burn with the best,
you're just like nothing.

drowning in water is a lot like falling
through air [but burnt lungs sting and rot
and falling feels like flying, if
you do it right.]

you're just a pseudobird with murderous laments
and hollow bones to match your heart.
sweet little faker, you're a dusting of
aspartame. lovely pretender,
i watch as you try to   fly,
                            fly,
                       fly,
and break with you as you
                     fall,
                           fall,
                                  fall.


[dear bird, do you fall for me?]
:iconohsostarryeyed:

Author's Comments

<edit> THANK YOU, ~MissObsession FOR MAKING THIS WONDERFUL PHOTOOOOO :heart:

written after THE END [!!] of my standardised tests :D

i was pondering the last line...should it stay as-is, or change 'for' to 'like?'

alternate title: bird out of water

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:iconblackphoenix7127:
Whoa..... Can i steal your brain? this is utterly amazing :glomp:

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I believe in Michael Jackson as my personal savior, who died for our sins, and I'm not afraid to admit it. If you do too, copy and paste this into your signature
:iconitsxmagik:
askfhsjkadhfGAH.
Keep it as it is.
Godddd this is amazing.
:heart:


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make a map of what you see; direct pain effectively.
:iconkrish-x:
i think you should keep the last line as it is
and this is amazing. just phenominal (:


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Dreams can come true, but never fantasies, if you nurture a fantasy, it'll most likely get broken.
:icontheleavesofmemory:
speechless ... that is, just beautiful :heart:

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JN: ~25.09.89 - 14.01.09~ Forever in my heart

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:heart: CONTEST FOR A CAUSE! WINNERS [link] :heart:
:iconfreddieismyqueen:
I do agree that you should keep the last line as is. I think the impact is stronger that way.

BTW, I loved the whoooole piece!
:iconmissobsession:
flying is just falling in reverse. :heart:

[you're finished with SATs? BAH.]
:iconhot-sauce-vixxen:
Holy...:wow:

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...if you know what I mean.

TyZulaaaaaaaa. :heart::noes:

My icon was made my the incredibly awesome ~numbah3 ILU. :blowkiss:

Well slap me with a fish and call me grandma!
:iconohsostarryeyed:
noooo, i took the psat this year, but it didn't count because i'm a sophomore. i just took some shitty test that my state forces on us every few years.

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i like to
put haikus where they
don't belong.
:iconalbido:
Beautiful, especially this line-
[flying is just falling in reverse.]

:+fav:
:iconshep4life:
maybe like instead of for, but it works either way...I love that diagonal words...very visual...I like the line about flying is just falling in reverse...excellent work...need I say more? You are my new favorite poet on DA!

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"There is beauty in despair. You just have to know where to look." Me! ;)

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