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i like to think of you.
sometimes you are a butterfly,
wings stretched back
in long arcs,
bones breaking into flight
behind your protruding chest-
you are beautiful.

i find myself sinking
into the irish kills in your eyes,
the gaps in your smile.
i touch the cauterised cuts
sealed by metal and fire
on the backs of your swollen knuckles
and kiss your crooked lips.

in two months you will leave.
in the wake of st. valentine's sacrifice,
i will send my heart to war with you.
look beneath your pillow
and find it there;
look in the space between your walls
and there it will be;
look within your chest, beside your own heart
and there it will stay.

look me in the eye
and tell me what it's like
to be loved by me;

i want to know that the way
you make my bones ache
with swells of ardor
is yours;
i want to know that the way
my mouth dips into the
hollow of your neck,
finding its pulse at ease,
is perpetual
and strong,
ceaseless,
unending.
the two two's = intentional
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"i like to think of you.
sometimes you are a butterfly,
wings stretched back
in long arcs,
bones breaking into flight
behind your protruding chest-
you are beautiful.

i find myself sinking
into the irish kills in your eyes,
the gaps in your smile.
i touch the cauterised cuts
sealed by metal and fire
on the backs of your swollen knuckles
and kiss your crooked lips."

The rest of the stanzas don't flow and aren't fitting to the exquisite beginning of the first two stanzas. Hell, I think the ending of the second stanza is great way to close the poem.
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Saidye Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Completely wonderful work, as always.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
thank you <333
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maybeTHEN Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
sad but rather lovely crafted <3
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
thank you!!
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