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fate-fallen smiles like lemon wedges
spread over faces pulled tight with skin.

i have forgotten my name but i do remember
yours. hello, how are you?

i like the consonants you speak and the
oblong vowels in your name- how they
get stuck in the u-bend of your neck
and slide like stones from the cliff you like
to sing from.

would you mind if we sang together? i am
tone-deaf but i hear heartbeats like motors
and do not fall, please do not fall.

you are a broken wind-up clock with
broken wind-up cogs and
broken wind-up gears and
if you need a hand to hold, i'd rather it
be mine than hers.

i'm going to stand here paranoid and
tell me- what will you make of it?
:iconohsostarryeyed:

Author's Comments

my writing is hopelessly confused.
my writing is me, if you were wondering.

Comments


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:iconesotericheart:
First?

But yes, I think this is love.
:iconhot-sauce-vixxen:
"i like the consonants you speak and the
oblong vowels in your name- how they
get stuck in the u-bend of your neck
and slide like stones from the cliff you like
to sing from.
"

Fucking amazing.

--
...with pudding. :eyes:

Avataaaarrrr. :heart::noes:

"Gay"? "Bisexual"? Don't you just mean "awesome"?
:iconscribalwriter:
Second last stanza - just incredible. So fluid and intense. The lines give off that feeling of confusion. Without making us confused, I might add. ^_^ Wonderfully done.
:iconbellapotter:
"i like the consonants you speak and the
oblong vowels in your name- how they
get stuck in the u-bend of your neck
and slide like stones from the cliff you like
to sing from.

would you mind if we sang together? i am
tone-deaf but i hear heartbeats like motors
and do not fall, please do not fall." this is love.

--
so, tell me, darling, do you wish we'd fall in love? [all the time, all the time.]---the saltwater room; owl city
:iconcgirl1015:
I love the way you put this together!
:iconforcopeland:
the way you describe things is too damn beautiful...*jealousy*

--
short and stocky, dammit!
:iconlittlewhite-shadows:
fate-fallen smiles like lemon wedges
spread over faces pulled tight with skin.


i would tell you i like this, but i don't think 'like' would be the right word. :heart:
:iconohsostarryeyed:
hmmm..what do you think would be a better word?

--
i like to
put haikus where they
don't belong.
:iconohsostarryeyed:
:love: love to you!

--
i like to
put haikus where they
don't belong.

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