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you left me in my bed-
i was crying-
when you walked down my stairs
for the last time.

you were to spend the night-
you lived hours away-
until you told me
you couldn't do this
anymore.

i was fine-
you were just a constellation-
until your words
forced images of my last love
before my mind's eye.

i cried before you-
i hadn't cried in months-
but i didn't cry for you.

in retrospect, as you closed my door-
it was the last time-
my only thought is
why didn't we fuck
before saying goodbye?
in the sky or in your bed



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i find this funny because literally this is all i see our relationship as nowadays
i get mad that he has a new girlfriend, whom i'd already met
because maybe she's better than me
and certainly thinner
but really
no sex? we had all the privacy in the world hglkdfhg
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
i like

"i cried before you-
i hadn't cried in months-
but i didn't cry for you."

powerful sentiment. as is the entire poem.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
thank you!
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wongy06 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012
My dear, "better" is a relative term.

Just like constellations, we don't get warmer as we get closer - only with time.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
:glomp: thank you!!
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:iconwongy06:
wongy06 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
No problem - just be you.
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dietcocaine Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012   Writer

Oh my god. This. Thisthisthis.
This is exactly how it went, the only difference was the distance (because he only lived about an hour away), and "I didn't cry for you", because I did. And just oh my god this.
There are so many things you just said without saying that I couldn't put into words in all these months.
I needed to read this. I'm sorry that it happened to you, too.
I find it funny that we didn't have sex until months after we'd broken up.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
i'm so glad <3333
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012   Writer
i cried before you-
i hadn't cried in months-
but i didn't cry for you.


the rhythm & sentiment are heavenly.


also, there is a place by my house
called Heavenly Bodies
that is either an observatory
or a male stripclub.

(okfineitsthelatter.)
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
this comment just makes me happy every time i see it.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012   Writer
:heart:
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