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hold my waist              like an urn,
no      questions   asked.

careful.                       moonlight.
            wings folded      like oil          under the covers.
legs.                  flesh.

still me, love.
i don't want to move.
move me, love.
i want you still.

break bones
for                
              sand  -    art.
swallow me,
spit me
out.



use      my   blood                      as paint.
r o l l                     my
tongue
over
canvas.

hold my   thighs like
          birds,
watch me tremble.

hair the color of
                                                   f r e c k l e s
                             in my eyes.

slouching twin scoliosis.


spina bifida.


bernoullian spiral shell
curling round my spine.


avogadro's
                               number.
call              me
       (home).



love (,) a lost bird.
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kinda visual, i think


something different. x
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:iconformaniac:
formaniac Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012  Student Writer
"avogadro's
number.
call me
(home).
"

this part is darling. i mean that in the most flattering, inspired, gawking way.
beautiful piece as always :heart: ~~
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
ahhh, thank you <3333
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:iconformaniac:
formaniac Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012  Student Writer
:hug:
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:iconiceblueeyedgirl:
Iceblueeyedgirl Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very lovely darling and the format is captivating!!!
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012
thank you!!
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Professional Writer
This is amazing:

still me, love.
i don't want to move.
move me, love.
i want you still.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
thank you very much :heart:
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:iconamweitz:
AMWeitz Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011  Student Writer
I fell in love with this at the first line. WHAT a simile. "hold my waist like an urn". UGG. :heart:

This also brings up a question! I've been trying to create space in my poems, like this one, and I've done it before in several of my older poems, but suddenly dA isn't letting my do it. How did you create the spacings in this poem? (Perhaps it's just my computer...?)


P.S. It's good to be back. I've missed your poems like crazy!!
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2011
thank you!!
also, i don't know -- this is fairly old, so i don't know if things changed or what!
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:iconamweitz:
AMWeitz Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:
Ahhh, okay. Thank you :)
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Professional Writer
this is absolutely beautiful.... the sparseness of it, the energy of the piece..... simply gorgeous :heart:
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2011
thank you <3
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:iconpagan-poetess:
pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2011  Professional Writer
you're most welcome :)
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JuliusScipio Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2011  Student Writer
Hold my waist like an urn....

Superb! I enjoy your vivid imagery. The striking uniqueness of them gives these poems its blood and bone. :)
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pretty-calla-lily22 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2011
It is something different. But different is often beautiful. :)
I see you spent a lot of time on the format...it adds to your piece!

Your words paint a vivid picture that swirls in my imagination of love and desire and need.
Lovely.
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chaoticserenity1 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2011
This is really beautiful <3
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Words-In-A-Needle Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2011  Student Artist
i knew i loved you before.
but this made me in love with you.

<3
this is beyond beautiful.
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:iconwhoobie:
whoobie Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
i really love this :) its so different and interesting to read.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner May 28, 2011
thank you!!
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:icontheboyandhislion:
theboyandhislion Featured By Owner May 8, 2011
i think i love you and your writing.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner May 8, 2011
i will offer you a spot in my heart
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:icontheboyandhislion:
theboyandhislion Featured By Owner May 8, 2011
why offer, what made me deserving?
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner May 8, 2011
because something tells me you're beautiful
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:icontheboyandhislion:
theboyandhislion Featured By Owner May 8, 2011
"beauty is in the eyes of the beholder" lol wanted to say beerholder.
but i don't see myself except average.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner May 8, 2011
you seem like a beautiful person thus far, so i'm sticking by my guns
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:icontheboyandhislion:
theboyandhislion Featured By Owner May 8, 2011
haha if you say so.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner May 8, 2011
because something tells me you're beautiful
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irvon Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2011
The way how lines mix together intrigues me, I can read this in any direction. I also tried zooming out just to see the beautiful visual outline of this poem. And that thing with avogadro's number is clever :)

Beautiful!
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2011
aw, thank you so much! this made me happy!
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:iconirvon:
irvon Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2011
You're welcome :)
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samsarasurfing1 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011
Beautiful
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9631-meaningless Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2011
that's something beautiful.
:heart:
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2011
:hug:
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Ospreyghost13 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2011  Student Digital Artist
You write such beautiful rhythm. :)
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2011
thank you :heart:
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LurveeYouu Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2011  Student Writer
something different? something incredible.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2011
thank you, love
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Icecold13 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2011
This is great visual poetry. I applaud you.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2011
thank you :D
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crazyrussian97 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2011
Love isn't itself a lost bird; it makes lost birds out of all of us.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2011
i suppose that is another interpretation of the line
i meant it like a closing of a letter, or instructions to love a bird
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youmeat6 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2011
I think i'm blind... or stupid.. I adore the poem but i can't see the picture... or is there not meant to be a physical picture and i'm being silly...
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2011
not a physical picture ;P
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youmeat6 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2011
oh ok ^-^.. i thought it was one of those things where the words made up a picture and the words were about that picture.. yeh know.. but not.. so i'm not missing out :giggle:
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vampirehimora Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011
reminds me of that one poem by e.e. cummings about a grasshopper. the visual thing, that is. very neat.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2011
i'm ashamed for not having read as much cummings as i know i should, and would like to read, but thank you i'm sure, i love what i have read of his!
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vampirehimora Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2011
i honestly dont read too much poetry, its just one i remember because i love the crazy word format:
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:D
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gorskig Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011
Love the visual aspect, and the poem is still readable. :) I really love the way the poem opens. Well done.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2011
thank you!! :heart:
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gorskig Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2011
You're welcome! :heart:
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