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December 22, 2010
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you think it's funny how people
will keep laughing and talking
about themselves when the world
is falling down around you.

they don't even notice.
everyone is their imagined audience,
but really, the chairs are empty.  
we're all one man shows.

it's called egocentrism.
it means we all think we're the only things
worth notice. it means there is no one
but me.

that's when reality -
a sickening,
car crash;
white-hot metal;
whirring rims undressed
from tires -

that's when you realise
you're less important
than anyone else on the planet.
that's when you sink to your bedroom floor,
and cry until the rug is saturated
with enough salt to build an ocean.

this is called an inferiority complex.
it means i think i'm a piece of shit
when compared to a piece of shit.

you're terrified of things
with concepts
like love or marriage
or poker or sculpture
or sex or economics.

and so you write,
but only when the sky
is blacker than a
raven's feather.
it's called nighttime in the city.
it's called a second shot at life,
deep in the recesses of evening:

it's called a coping mechanism.
it means it never works
without destroying

--extremely loud and incredibly close, p. 273

a jsf-inspired title and poem, in a chuckie p.-inspired style.
best of both worlds.

(just done in a shitty way.)
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Xerolien Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I like the "shitty" way :dalove: ^^; :+fav:
Before I read your notes at the bottom, I was going to say this was very Palahniuk. Wonderful. :D
storyofmylife054 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011
you are incredible.
MissUnderstand Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
I enjoyed the car crash bit "whirring rims undressed from tires", and the part about having enough salt to build an ocean.
The flow seems off to me. More like you're just speaking it to me. Which also makes it feel very personal. Hmm...
XxLonesomeDovexX Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2010
Parts of it sorta reminded me of Buwkowski :heart:
Liked it alotlotlotlot:)
Terroris-Blacklisted Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2010  Student General Artist
You inspired me to pick my trusty old pen and scribble away some gibberish in my journal. I've been at it for hours now, but its still not where it needs to be. I'll let you know if/when I post the results...
-dragonpoet Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2010
Absolutely amazing
Den12 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
Amazing stuff. Yet sad but beauty comes from pain. And joy is even more wonderful when you know the contrast it makes with pain.
FoolishPrideX Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
I love that book.
and this is so good!
Makola94 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
so much feeling.
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