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i watched you,
bone-handled
battered and floral
suitcase in hand,
as your knotted tree-branch fingers
grip the doorhandle.

i watched you
disappear
before the door swung
shut.
i saw your thin skin
slip between pavement
and cracks in the concrete
city walls.
your keys sunk through
the hole in your pocket
and are sitting at the
side of the sink,
your lunch in the bowels
of the toilet.

i watched your mouth
of broken teeth
spit vitriol soundlessly,
your tendons splitting
from your frame,
you have unravelled into nothing,
i watched you
pack your things and
i smiled.
written in treatment, about a person, a loved one, a murderer
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justawhore Featured By Owner May 10, 2013
let's see how you smile when its my turn :) you wont be such a sarcastic,loud mouth, nigger sucking cunt when we are together. This makes my life wortwhile. Nothing will give me more satisfaction. Please say something nasty. I want to hurt someone else close to you and tell them it was because you couldnt keep your blue toothed mouth shut. My homies are so looking forward to it. I got them all excited with your pictures(ok-it was the 7 year old ones)
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pengirl100and2 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   Writer
see ya.

You write the person as being broken, as someone deserving to be broken. It sounds vengeful but not cruel, if that makes any sense.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
i think that explains my relationship with my eating disorder pretty well, actually. i have a lot to be angry for, but like as i'm yelling at it to leave its keys on the counter and not come back, i tell it good luck and i hope it finds happiness anyway. it's a weird thing
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is great, all of it.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
thank you!
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LasAlasDelAlma Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
love love love this.

I MISS YOU.
you've been gone from here, and also kind of from tumblr.
i miss you and 'get well soon' is the wrong thing to say, but i don't know what else to say, because i just miss you and your pretty face and THE END.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
I MISS YOU <333333
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