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it's something
you'll realise
like an electrical fire
and my god,
it will hurt
and you will smile
because it hurt
and that means
it wasn't all a dream.
just a quick bit of writing
scrawled in my notebook in really awful handwriting
i feel like that makes it worth a little bit more, honestly
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commonMSconception Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
My boy lives across the better part of two continents and an ocean. I've seen him twice in six years. This is beautiful.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
ugh it's misery. thank you, dear <3
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mouseluva Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012  Student General Artist
This is perfect. Love is terrifying too. My 'The Boy' is currently on his second 12-hour flight somewhere over the Pacific on his way to see me for the first time and I have no idea how I feel but everything will be fine as soon as the airport shuttle pulls into my driveway tomorrow morning.
This poem is one of the most perfect things I have ever read, especially right now.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012
oh good lordie! so much good luck!! (mine's overseas right now, in spain, for another four weeks and then i have three weeks with him.)
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mouseluva Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012  Student General Artist
He arrives in a couple of hours and i cant even
Much luck for yours ^^ Distance is tough, but rewarding, if you've got someone worth it (:
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012
HOW? EXPLAIN? GOOD? YES?ghlkfdejg!,
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:iconmouseluva:
mouseluva Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Student General Artist
Absolutely wonderful beyond words ^^ We're going to go on our first date on Friday :D
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012
oh my goodness, i am so, so happy for you, you don't even know <33333333333
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mouseluva Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you ^^ How long until your 'The Boy' returns from le Spain? I actually met mine while he was in Spain, though he is English like me so we've got all the pop culture in common. I like it very much when he speaks Spanish though ;D :blush:
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ArthurCrow Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012  Professional Writer
So much expressed in so few words, loved it!
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
thank you :]
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Professional Writer
i love this.... so simple but so very powerful :)
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
thank you!
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012  Professional Writer
you're very welcome! :)
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AmateurExpert92 Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
I love it. It's so short, but very meaningful :)
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
thanks <333
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glossolalias Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
it was powerful, but there's something about the last three lines that doesn't strike me right; perhaps it's the meter? i know it's free verse, but they just don't flow into one another as well as the rest of it. otherwise, it's strong and the briefness makes it stronger.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
if i adjusted the line breaks, would that help? thank you <3
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
perhaps making "it wasn't all a dream" one line

or

and that means it wasn't
all a dream

or

and that means
it wasn't
all a dream
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
took your advice (i'm so slow, ugh), thank you for the help!!
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
oh, it's all right! you're welcome!

and yes, yes. you picked my favorite of the alterations, haha.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
it would; i do like your wording, and i wouldn't want you to change that.
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anyimacielgray Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
i love you.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
i love you too <3333
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LandNarwals Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
So awesome

[link] Please I would like some advice on my writing. =) Just awesome

Nice writing! =)
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Anaiya12 Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
So nice!
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
thanks!
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ConvictionbyLarm Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Student General Artist
I love your words, and the way you find them to describe those feelings
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
aw, thanks!
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KasuKane Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
I agree with this.... ;-;
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
:hug:
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BattleDaughter Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Short, but meaningful. I like it :D
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
<3thanks!
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Hakyness3876 Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
powerful.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
:glomp:!
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Talidaga-Montrega Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Student General Artist
:iconiloveitplz:
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
:iconguntherplz: ;D :heart:
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SILENCE866 Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Professional Writer
nice
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
thanks
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SILENCE866 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Welcome
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sumgie1 Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
Neat. :)
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
thanks!
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allie-xx Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
succinctly elegant.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
thanks!
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Johhy55 Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
Really beautiful poem!
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
thanks!
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kosha21 Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
i love this! :D
makes a whole lotta sense :)
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
;P thanks!
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meghan-solo Featured By Owner May 28, 2012
honestly this is honest and it's the best

:heart: faved
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