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i'm starting to feel
the intensity of the silence
linger on my back again,
your fingers, my spine.
it scares me,
how heavy a hand
can be on a body.

for this,
i pretend we are both windows,
open to the world,
yet still a layer of glass
to keep ourselves safe,
or really, each other.

it would be wrong
for me to say
i don't worry every night,
before i fight for
a few hours' sleep-
the only thing
i can never believe in-
that no matter how much
i become,
better will never mean best
for you.

i am malleable like clay,
the dirt and water
i find in my hands
after i extract them,
like hands full of golden teeth,
from my mouth.

some day,
i hope to say
that it has been months
since i have felt this earth,
these warm motes like bodies
clinging to the backs
of my fingers,
how heavy hands
can be on a body;

fingers, yours,
spine, mine.
full title: love(,)sick girl's heart

this came out better than i expected
i have a final tomorrow
and a paper to finish by friday
and i still have roughly 3.75 pages left to do
but at least it's on kafka and vonnegut
i love my absurdists
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
"that no matter how much
i become,
better will never mean best
for you."

wow. yep. that's it.
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
myheartcage Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011
you have the most beautiful way of putting words together. every one of your pieces is better than the last.
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2011
i heart you.
sidd-says-gimme Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
This is perfect. Really, I mean it.
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
thank you, beauty
YourBuddyBill Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Others of us have been in similar situations. Sometimes, if the other is doing nothing but hurting you, it takes an ultimatum: All or nothing. If he isn't willing to do what it takes, then maybe he's not the right one for you. Maybe the right one is out there somewhere, you just gotta find each other.
Don't get all depressed. We understand.
This extremely well written and very beautiful! I love the ending, how you repeat the same words from the first verse. Your analogies and metaphors are lovely as always!
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012
thank you, lovely!
wolf3dreamer Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011
I think you visit my mind sometimes. Or perhaps the other way around. Because your work reflects my life so accurately sometimes, it's scary. :faint:
Please don't stop. You give words to my troubles :worship:
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