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i dont need another beautiful person
burning cars crashing like thunder
on the low shoulders of slick
roads.

break my body into dirt and sand;
bury me under unequivocal volumes
of disparity and aches, throbs
building climatically, latitude and longitude
inching closer and closer under
the closet door; hide my sorrows and
insufficiency in the bends of insatiable
arms and bring me away from the wall.

i have trusted the moon to hold up to man,
i have trusted the world to see
the beauty in things longing
to keep esoteric,
but the bleeding
never ebbs and
the cuts never heal.
the hearts pound
like iron hammers in empty rooms,
reverberations painting cowards
in their
frozen poses.

i dont need another beautiful person
another set of dangerous lips
to murmur and pry like the
thin legs of butterflies
smudging the lining of my heart
and breaking full wings like a cocoon.
shreds of gauze and structure
burst like rice paper
until i am weak and limp, sinking,
gaunt cheeks, into the hollow
bones the beautiful call
home.
oh, why do i write. i dont know, this didnt need to happen, this wasnt meant to happen.

(honestly, probably got the title from 'jennifers body' which was an absolute shitfest.)
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:iconninjawaffels:
ninjawaffels Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014
the part that hit me the most was "but the bleeding never ebbs and the cuts never heal." I might have almost cried 
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner May 25, 2014
aww! thank you <3
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EsotericHeart Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2010
from my backlog of deviations, latelatelate.

hi lovely, you're lovely, and this is like the tide on sand.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2010
i lalalalove you.
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einnobztron Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010  Student Writer
. . .into the hollow
bones the beautiful call
home.


what a lovely, heartbreaking poem. . .and such a perfect ending.
I always wish that I could use the body in my writing as you do, even though that sounds a little sketchy. . .:P
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2010
youre very lovely, you know. i wish i could incorporate other things into my writing better! haha i feel like body related things are common.
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einnobztron Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2010  Student Writer
:aww:
I suppose body-related things are common, but few can use them the way you do, so. . . :D
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2010
haha, well thank you, sweetie :heart:
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:icondeadxbirds:
deadxbirds Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2010
god that movie was horrendous
but this is not
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2010
wasnt it just? i was like, ...woooooooow.
thank you!
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Wolf-Flash Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2010
Your words are powerful and moving.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2010
thank you :heart:
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Horris Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2010
"to murmur and pry like the
thin legs of butterflies
smudging the lining of my heart
and breaking full wings like a cocoon."

Love- of the much variety.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2010
love - of the YOU variety.
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photographic-eyes Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Do you have any idea how perfect this is?
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010
do you have any idea how lovely you are?
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photographic-eyes Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Oh my..
Blushes.
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myheartyoung Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
<3
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
:heart:
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smalltalk Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010   Writer
The last stanza is perfect, good job.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
thanks so much!
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Jedi53 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
like the way you use these words, you use words that carry a lot of feeling, PURRTY FREAKIN AWESOME
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
haha, thank you! :heart:
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scarsliehidden Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
incredible.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
merci :heart:
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scarsliehidden Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010
de rien :)
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LeftForLove Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
I adore these three lines:

"another set of dangerous lips
to murmur and pry like the
thin legs of butterflies"
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
thank you!!
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Chuchkit Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
For goodness sake! Would you please stop apologizing for writing?
It's like saying "Why did I take that breath right now? I'll try my best not to do that again, really. Promise."


p.s.
Jennifer's body was.. meh.
Apparently the one with M.Fox is a remake of an older one.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
no!

i thought it was a stupidddddd movie. and megan fox is overrated to me
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:iconchuchkit:
Chuchkit Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010
a. oh well..
b. i think so too.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I saw that movie on the rack at a best buy. Was trying to figure out what the heck it was about. It seemed like it was the sort of movie you don't generally find out in the open of a normal movie store. I couldn't tell anything about it, except that I probably didn't want to watch it.

Glad to hear that seems to be a good thing.

This poetry is unlike the feeling I got from the cover of that movie. :giggle: I like this.
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starlight-silence Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010  Student Writer
gah beautiful people hurt so much!! i totally agree. this is beautifully constructed. you are amazing.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
they do, give it and take it. thank you, lovely :heart:
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CreativeJuices Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010   Writer
It is quite gorgeous, to be honest. :heart:
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
thank you!!
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silklilies Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
i don't need "beautiful" people either

you're a fantastic writer.
never give up please,
even to yourself
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
i dont need them, but i want them. they hurt the most, give and take. and i seem to fall in love with every single one of them i find.

oh ive given up on myself in a plethora of ways, haha its fine, dont worry
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silklilies Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
i think i have a lot of hope so i've stopped giving up because when i dream about the beautiful girl and her still loving me, i need to be strong for myself and know that it's no good.
they do hurt the most
even if they don't realize just how.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2010
i cant get the beautiful boy hellbent on poisoning himself to try to prove hes happy when he isnt out of my head, either. they hurt like fucking hell. hes the saddest person ive ever known, and hes the person whos made me saddest in my life. and i love him more than anyone. isnt that sick?
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silklilies Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
ohmygod i know exactly
i mean exactly what that's like.
she's so tragic and i love her more than anything even though she takes me down with her

it is sick.

you have to swim up alone or drown with them
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2010
he changed me with who he was when we first started talking, the current him has no effect on me except that it makes me miss who he really is, makes me really sad, and doesnt like talking to me because im too perceptive and i know thats it. if he wants to take me down with him, ill let him. thats what sickens me. and its great, to most people, i pretend he doesnt exist. my therapist doesnt know a thing of him because i refuse to admit hes had an impact on me.
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silklilies Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
i have a therapist too
and the very second she told me that it wasn't awful to love her...i loved her with my whole heart again even though I myself knew better.

this is exactly how i feel. who she is now is a colder and more bitter thing than what i loved because of us.

the idea of being with them...
it is..
standing on the edge
knowing it would feel
so good
to fall, the flying, exhilerating

then you remember the cement at the bottom
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2010
thats almost like...bad of her to have told you that. but i understand.

for me, hes gone in the other direction. hes in such denial about his sadness. so hes thrown himself into drugs because friends come with drugs and he loves them how they dont love him, and it kills me. he was all surprised that he was sad after a bad bit of drugs, said it was an aftereffect. im pretty sure it was just that he was properly sober for awhile and his sadness came back.

the cement is okay sometimes
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Spamuel Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010   Writer
I still haven't seen Jennifer's Body, but the human male in me may give in yet.

Oh -- and this is your best piece in quite some time. Nicely done. :)
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
sigh...its not worth it, haha

ooh, thank you!
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DEAD-OnTheInside Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
You take my thoughts away, and I'm left speechless.
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Voidzy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010   Interface Designer
Remarkable translation of complicated emotions.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010
aw, thank you :heart:
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amandaxjayx17 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2010
lol that movie was so terrible, and yet i thoroughly loved it. i think megan fox's body had a loooot to do with it..
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