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it's sort of like-

how i felt my stomach shake and
my heart blushed at thoughts of words in
pink ink and
i was going to say something to make you
look at me,
to really look at me
and maybe i wouldn't look like i was the little girl i
used to babysit;
maybe i would look like a heart or you would see the
outline of my bra and maybe i wouldn't
feel like an infant with an old soul in your too-tall world;

how i can never answer a question
too close to my
heart or
arm or
leg or
me, because i don't like being touched and
will shy away from the proximity,
shrug some space into our bodies;

how i think about it
forever after,
half-hoping you didn't remember
what you asked,
half-hoping you will ask me
again and i can answer you with words instead
of overzealous nerves and
accidental lies;

how i want to write you something beautiful,
i want to write about you and
put a whole person in a few haphazard words,
put you in my pocket and carry you with me because
i hate being alone and i would hate for you to be alone and
i can't stop worrying unless you are close though
i can't stand to be touched and
i want to make an exception for you
because you, yourself are an exception.
:iconohsostarryeyed:

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reason no. 3: i try to change the way you think of me but it always backfires

another piece of absolute shit, haha.
what scares me is the possibility of subconscious influence.

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:iconxxlonesomedovexx:
I think it's lovely :heart:
The first stanza is my favorite, I think :D

--
it was a bad day. the sun exploded;
the earth roiled and tore entire cities asunder;
the bus in front of my car crashed violently and everyone died;
i ran out of green tea.


~ ohsostarryeyed :sun:
:iconchloroformboy:
I love the last stanza

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i make them good girls go bad !
:iconirpinkrobotx3:
this is so perfect it's hard to explain how much i love it.
everything flows so wonderfully, like water down a drain or (in a more optimistic simile) like silk sliding across skin.


how i want to write you something beautiful,
i want to write about you and
put a whole person in a few haphazard words
,
put you in my pocket and carry you with me because
i hate being alone and i would hate for you to be alone


that so beautifully hit home that i had to smile like an idiot. xD


--
i'm outdated, overrated
morning seems so far away.

so i'll sing a melody

your lullaby for all the times
hoping that my voice can get it right.
:icono--tebem--o:
"i was going to say something to make you
look at me,
to really look at me
and maybe i wouldn't look like i was the little girl i
used to babysit;"

lovely :heart:

--
------
"Rage, rage against the dying of the light"
-Dylan Thomas

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:iconcleveland49:
you've never written anything quite like this before

--
'I caught Evil Mark licking his stapler.'
:iconxxx-fancy-xxx:
the last stanza = love.
(and so is the rest of it, but, last stanza = superlove. XD <3)

"another piece of absolute shit, haha."
butwhy?D=

--
love, and life, and chocolate (but not dark), and orange, and green, and indigo, and heartbreak, and flying, and dreams, and muffins, and ducks, and living in a fantasy.
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Vote Earth! =]
:icontworoads:
Love it.
Lol, perhaps it's my ex's subconscious. The first stanza is about dead on.


`n


--
i'm a million different people from one day to the next.


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:iconbellapotter:
"how i want to write you something beautiful,
i want to write about you and
put a whole person in a few haphazard words,
put you in my pocket and carry you with me because
i hate being alone and i would hate for you to be alone and
i can't stop worrying unless you are close though
i can't stand to be touched and
i want to make an exception for you
because you, yourself are an exception." Um. Can you read my thoughts? Or, rather, my heart? Because if I could write this well, this is totally what I would say to him.

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so, tell me, darling, do you wish we'd fall in love? [all the time, all the time.]---the saltwater room; owl city
:iconscribalwriter:
I think you're too hard on yourself lately. You writing's beautiful - don't forget that. I think we are all the hardest on our own works. It's easy for us to look at our own pieces and only see the faults, but it's even easier for others to look and see the rights. There are gorgeous lines in this. The flow is perfect and the story is bittersweet. It's a very good piece. :heart: Lighten up on yourself, girl. ^_^
:iconjackielfult:
this is my favourite of the series i think !

--
They don't know nothing about redemption.
They don't know nothing about recovery.

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