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i only want to fall in love
if someone is there
to fall with me.

i want to jump from high places
and pretend i'm flying,
i'm a bird, i'm light enough at-fucking-last
for the air to catch me,
and the harsh grounds beneath me?
can't touch this.

but i'm earthbound
and parachutes will not work
if you do not open them,
and i am just so sick
of feeling like maybe,
becoming an abstract painting
on the rocks below, would be enough...

but there is something beating in my chest.
i'm very afraid of what it is.

and i don't know a lot,
like the size of the universe.
or why you sought solace in the south.
or how i came to be in this crater that swallowed me whole;

but i do know the second you told me
you felt the same for me like i did for you,
something in my universe shifted.
part of my soul went to georgia...
and i began to climb.

look.
the purpose of life is to knock you on your ass
so you have to do something with it to get back up.
i don't know about you,
but i'm pretty fuckin' tired of feeling the dirt on my back
and seeing the same stars rise every night.
i don't know about you,
but i'm pretty fuckin' ready to join them.
and i know now, i don't have wings,
they're something you make for yourself or for someone
who gives you the lightness to feel closer to the sky.
i know i can't fly right now, but maybe if i keep trying,
maybe i'll get there.

so for now,
i climb.
another i'd consider performing?

I'M PERFORMING THIS IN FRONT OF MY BOYFRIEND NEXT WEEK. PLEASE TELL ME IF I'M DOING ALRIGHT, OR HOW TO IMPROVE: [link]
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JustIrrelevant Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
I really really really really like this poem.
I'm not good at describing why, I always need better words than the ones that come to my mind, so if I were to describe this poem (or other poems of yours for that matter), I would have to invent them. So, I'll just settle with this:
I really really really really like this poem.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
thank you kindly <3
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tiajones Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i just really like this one.

i've read it several times.
and i couldn't think of anything worth your time to say.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
anything you have to say is worth my time, lovely
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:icontiajones:
tiajones Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
well, i really like this one.
and i'm so very glad that you write.
it's beautiful.
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bringyourownbomb Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Student Writer
this really is such a beautiful poem to read out loud, and just beautiful in general. <3
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
thank you so much, love <3
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Lunausa Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
absolutely love this and some of the phrases are amazing but i felt you might have sworn a bit too much, don't know about anyone else but i just think that the swearing took away a bit of the beauty of this poem but apart from that WOW you keep getting better and better!
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
ah, i do that sometimes haha but thank you!!
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QuenWrites Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful :heart:
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
thank you :heart:
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not good at giving advice on something like this, mostly because I don't perform my poems at all, so I don't have any idea on how to actually do it. With that said, I'll still give it a try. You spoke the "can't touch this." line perfectly, as well as the "i'm very afraid of what it is." line. I felt the impact of them when read them aloud. And that also goes for the lines "part of my soul went to georgia...
and i began to climb.".

The only thing that did not hit me as hard, being read aloud, as it did when I first read it, was these two lines: "becoming an abstract painting
on the rocks below, would be enough...", but I can't tell you why. Perhaps, when I read it, I made that punchline heavier than it was supposed to be? You still read it in a good way and I'm sorry that I can't explain it any better. I hope you can take something from this, I have it a shot ^^
The poem is beautiful and he is going to love it.
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
*when you read them aloud.
**I gave it a shot.
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brokenglass16 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Student Writer
I don't know about the "can't touch this" line... but the rest is absolute brilliance.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
thanks!!
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Marusska Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
oh thank you for sharing this :heart:
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
thank YOU!
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Marusska Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
always a great pleasure.
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012   Writer
hell yes (to your question)
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tiajones Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
beautiful. absolutely beautiful.
this is so well done.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
thank you so much!
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:icontiajones:
tiajones Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome, darling. <3
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doublethefun Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
Amazing work.
The last verse spoke to me.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
:glomp:
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whitetippedwaves Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is stunning. :heart:
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
<33333
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Zwirrow Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
Loooooove this!! :heart:
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
i'm glad!
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sense-and-stupidity Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Student Writer
"part of my soul went to georgia...
and i began to climb."

That line just spoke to me. It hit me hard and I could relate. :) If I could be anywhere, it would be California.
I love the idea behind this.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
i getcha <3 thank you!!
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