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i only want to fall in love
if someone is there
to fall with me.

i want to jump from high places
and pretend i'm flying,
i'm a bird, i'm light enough at-fucking-last
for the air to catch me,
and the harsh grounds beneath me?
can't touch this.

but i'm earthbound
and parachutes will not work
if you do not open them,
and i am just so sick
of feeling like maybe,
becoming an abstract painting
on the rocks below, would be enough...

but there is something beating in my chest.
i'm very afraid of what it is.

and i don't know a lot,
like the size of the universe.
or why you sought solace in the south.
or how i came to be in this crater that swallowed me whole;

but i do know the second you told me
you felt the same for me like i did for you,
something in my universe shifted.
part of my soul went to georgia...
and i began to climb.

look.
the purpose of life is to knock you on your ass
so you have to do something with it to get back up.
i don't know about you,
but i'm pretty fuckin' tired of feeling the dirt on my back
and seeing the same stars rise every night.
i don't know about you,
but i'm pretty fuckin' ready to join them.
and i know now, i don't have wings,
they're something you make for yourself or for someone
who gives you the lightness to feel closer to the sky.
i know i can't fly right now, but maybe if i keep trying,
maybe i'll get there.

so for now,
i climb.
another i'd consider performing?

I'M PERFORMING THIS IN FRONT OF MY BOYFRIEND NEXT WEEK. PLEASE TELL ME IF I'M DOING ALRIGHT, OR HOW TO IMPROVE: [link]
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JustIrrelevant Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
I really really really really like this poem.
I'm not good at describing why, I always need better words than the ones that come to my mind, so if I were to describe this poem (or other poems of yours for that matter), I would have to invent them. So, I'll just settle with this:
I really really really really like this poem.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
thank you kindly <3
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tiajones Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i just really like this one.

i've read it several times.
and i couldn't think of anything worth your time to say.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
anything you have to say is worth my time, lovely
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tiajones Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
well, i really like this one.
and i'm so very glad that you write.
it's beautiful.
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bringyourownbomb Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Student Writer
this really is such a beautiful poem to read out loud, and just beautiful in general. <3
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
thank you so much, love <3
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Lunausa Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
absolutely love this and some of the phrases are amazing but i felt you might have sworn a bit too much, don't know about anyone else but i just think that the swearing took away a bit of the beauty of this poem but apart from that WOW you keep getting better and better!
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
ah, i do that sometimes haha but thank you!!
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QuenWrites Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful :heart:
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