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there is sand in my teeth
from days i don't remember;
hot-sun deserts singeing
the hairs on the back of my neck,
feet back from burns:

i know what it's like
playing with fire.
i know how to perch
like birds on my thin toes
along a wire,
i know the electricity
coursing through the rubber,
a centimetre from death:
i have yet to fall.

precarious placements
on precarious precipices,
i am wondering if my wings still work,
or if i've purged them out;
if they've atrophied from my back,
or filled with bile.

the sand shifts
and i am looking at bone.
a skeleton, full and articulate.
the desert has charred him black;
his skin has burned away.
he has
sand
in his teeth
from days
he will never remember.
more treatment writing idk this was just a lot of feeling
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SEECLEAR Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Professional Filmographer
nice
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
:aww:
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Aquarius-Claire Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Student Writer
i love you
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
i love you most
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Aquarius-Claire Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Student Writer
nuh uh
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
uh...yuh
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hazeltown Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"i know what it's like
playing with fire.
i know how to perch
like birds on my thin toes
along a wire,
i know the electricity
coursing through the rubber,
a centimetre from death:
i have yet to fall."



I love that.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
thank you :]
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"i know how to perch
like birds on my thin toes
along a wire,"

I think you should further this part into a new poem and continue the image. Lovely words.
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AMWeitz Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student Writer
This is absolutely wonderful. I don't agree with your comment; this is NOT just a lot of feeling. This is extremely well constructed, coherent, easy to read......and can I be perfectly honest? Sometimes I get overwhelmed with the imagery in your poems, because you often include so many different images with different textures and implications and whatnot that the poem becomes everything and nothing at once for me. (It's the same problem I often encounter with reading Dylan Thomas.) But this is different. It's simpler, and though extremely powerful emotionally, it's much more straightforward and less maddening with its expression. You have other images (the second and third stanzas), but you flesh out different aspects of the desert scene, really giving the reader the sensory experience of being in your shoes and making the emotion you've tied to the (desert) experience to all the more palpable. (Objective correlative, yay!)

Anyway, what I'm trying to say is, I really, really like this poem in particular.

(So don't diss it.) ;)
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