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she isn't mother goose by *ohsostarryeyed:iconohsostarryeyed:



i don't mind these stuttering stumbles
or watching lines fade in the sand
on thrumming nights. the pages of the
storybook tremble and fill with salt
before they sink to the bottom of the
sea with sharkbitten edges.

there's jack and jill
falling sideways from a hill,
breaking skulls along the way.
we'd fall harder still,
rocks set to kill,
and live some other day.

the night is too long when the clouds
forget to pull up the covers.
i miss the cricket music and the
florida sky is a little off-centre.
the strings trailing the stars are wrapped
on notches and pulled too tightly for
the wind to play.

hey diddle-diddle,
guitar broke the fiddle,
the mind jumps over the moon.
you're high as a kite,
and grinning too wide,
i'll watch you crash down soon.

i will let you pretend to be the air
or a tin can, if you'd prefer.
did you know, it is very difficult for
people to estimate how long it takes
them to fall asleep? tin cans and
air, you know, they don't need watches
or unconscious expulsions.

hickory dickory dock-
numbers fly off the clock.
faded lies
turn in jaded eyes,
hickory dickory dock.

she was not a bird, she realised.
she could not fly, and she was
not meant for land or air or lungs
or paperthin words on paperthin paper.
mother goose has shifted into a
shell and become mother fish,
forgetting her stories and singing
with the sirens in the sea.
:iconohsostarryeyed:

Author's Comments

for ~LurveeYouu, BECAUSE IT'S HER BIRTHDAY!

however, i am sorry. you make me want to use nursery rhymes, but i need to butcher them. then i need to butcher the butchered nursery rhymes.
i could redo, if you'd liiiike

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:iconheartofblueflame:
whoa. interesting and intriguing...the rhyming portions are fun.

--
"poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history" ~ plato
"the universe is made of stories, not of atoms." muriel rukeyser
:iconsylverwiings:
honestly,
this is my absolute favourite.
you just have NO idea whatsoever;
i mean, neither do i,
but this is bloody brilliant.
she is one lucky lucky&lucky girl to get this for her birthday,
honestly, you are wonderful.
BRILLIUS, GAH.!
[stares in awe]

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lyfe swept away the clouds;
smiling because the sun's sharing the sky,
& this girl can fly .
:iconglass-swirls:
AH MY GADS.
That was epic.
You butchered nursery rhymes, and yet I could still snurfle (yes snurfle) at jack and jill cracking skulls, and yet much worse can happen...
And aaah So awesome!
Keep on writing! I loooove your writing!
I could marry it, except it might jump into the sea...
:P
I guess I will have to kidnap you so you can continue writing theeem! :D

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:clap: Wonderful!

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:iconeefera:
This is Fabulous! with a capitol FFF. XD Nice write, hun. I love the nursery rhyme parts.

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I am a poet, but sometimes words fail me.

:iconvelocity07:
This is pure genius! Very intriguing how u used old nursery rhymes to come up with something totally original. <3
:iconsabergirl08:
this is so awesome!

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writing till the break of day
but I care not what they say
for they are why I am this way


Jody + Sabrina = :heart: Nov. 8th 2009
:iconaflwriting:
beautiful... you need to give yourself more credit. REALLY!

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His presence is enchantment,
You beg him not to go;
Old volumes shake their vellum heads
And tantalize, just so.

-emily dickinson-
:iconneyla25:
Absolutely lovely! :heart:

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I'll visit your bones next century.
:iconhot-sauce-vixxen:
Very unique and interesting. I really like the nursery-rhyme feel to it.

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