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lassitude builds
nests in my bones
flightless birds
forming words
as effective at becoming airborne
as the words "i'm sorry"
and sometimes
they just refused to try

the most prominent thought
circling my head
like the words that could soar
was knowledge-
there is a big chance
we will not make it through the night,
that i will never be held
captive
in the cage of your eyes
and trapped by a heart

i must be committing
some atrocities
but i do not know which ones-
there just might be
a limit
on the number of tears
you can shed
over one person;

we are not snakes
and cannot remove our skin
so we cry instead

but through the heat
i felt that sadness made
over the phone
i saw no end to us
where there would be
no end to us.
i think it really might be done this time
i haven't cried since we hung up but i have felt intimately, instinctually, primitively wanted
and that makes up for a lot
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peridot-magelette Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
this is lovely. i have to comment about the snake metaphor, too "so we cry instead." goodness. also,
"there is a big chance...
that i will never be held
captive
in the cage of your eyes"
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
thank you <3
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:iconqueenofrelax:
queenofrelax Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
i saw no end to us
where there would be
no end to us.


that is my favourite bit. the first stanza is also very, very good.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
thank you, beauty!
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queenofrelax Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012
my pleasure always (:
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CrackABone Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
stingy eyes.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
:[
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tiajones Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i know i'm just another comment about the same thing-
but these lines are just incredible. <3
"we are not snakes
and cannot remove our skin
so we cry instead"
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
eeeep thank you!!
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:icontiajones:
tiajones Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
<3 you're welcome darling
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