you, spider with convulsive compulsions, you
cannot teach the rain to sing, the moon to fly,
or the walls to listen.
when the moon breaks wings from its back,
and the rain hums twelve-bars, and the
walls murmur condolences,
we are fire-ridden;
we are wonderous;
we might be androids.
it's been two months and we
are left cutting away dead
limbs and cancerous fringes
like we're trees and scalpels,
inhuman and mournfully undying.
salt falls into the dirt, choking daisies
and breaking daffodil necks. what can you
do but wish to the stars and breathe
for breathing's sake?
dead flowers and arachnids, those were
what your eyes looked like. beautiful,
but not; safe, but poisonous; settled,
but travelling like gypsies; alive,
but so very dead.
i am terribly terrible, i am terribly
dilated, i am terribly apologetic, but
we are just beasts plagued by wanderlust
and frantic memory.













Comments
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I am a poet, but sometimes words fail me.
but there are really beautiful/amazing concepts in here. piece by piece it's great. love it. :'D
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This is really great in my opinion, it's pretty ANTI-horrible if u asked me.
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it was a bad day. the sun exploded;
the earth roiled and tore entire cities asunder;
the bus in front of my car crashed violently and everyone died;
i ran out of green tea.
~ ohsostarryeyed
you, spider with convulsive compulsions, you
cannot teach the rain to sing, the moon to fly,
or the walls to listen.
I agree with you a teeny bit about it not quite fitting together, though. While I do love each individual stanza, they're somewhat far apart from each other. It reads a little awkward because our little minds have to jump so quickly.
And the first stanza is so amazingamazingamazing.
This has so many great ideas in it.
I need to go think now.
x)
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i like to
put haikus where they
don't belong.
I kind of agree, and think the order is a little wacky, so I played with it a bit, and in my oh-so-humble opinion, I think the order should go...
Stanza 1,
Stanza 6,
Stanza 5,
Stanza 2,
Stanza 3,
Stanza 4.
But it is pretty cool the way it is, too. It's kind of like... mirroring the brokenupyetsomehowtogether thought patterns of some humans. XDD
Bah, don't listen to me. XD I'm just rambling.
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With love,
*Gir-Gir
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Fly me away,
take me away,
thank you!
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i like to
put haikus where they
don't belong.
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With love,
*Gir-Gir
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Fly me away,
take me away,
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