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to be sad
would to be
feeling fresh air
in withered lungs.

instead i sit,
atrophied
in stagnant misery,
festering wounds
and weeping wounds
and opened wounds
and clotted blood.

to hear the walls
chatter with criticisms
is an ache in my heart,
to know that i am of
empty worth in the eyes
of others.

my efforts are passed by
under the single blue eye
overseeing the universe.
i am unknown,
unseen,
and unbeautiful.

to be sad with my tears wiped away
would be the kindest motion
the fates could bestow.
i'm a miserable sap
i'd like to have just a little sadness instead

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Ashed-Visions Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your words are ever so beautiful, and ring with such a sadness that not many people experience in their life... especially not as frequently as some still do. Sadness would be a kindness, although, so would be being able to offer you the comfort of a simple hug.
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:iconmoscone73:
good poem, and I liked the one called liar also - by the way, it's nice to find another bukowski fan out there.
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shep4life Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
my efforts are passed by
under the single blue eye
overseeing the universe.
i am unknown,
unseen,
and unbeautiful.

to be sad with my tears wiped away
would be the kindest motion
the fates could bestow.

Heartbreaking
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littleblueraccoon Aug 5, 2013  Student Writer
This poem is so honest. You can feel the sadness in every line.
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lintu47 Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
thank you, dearest <3
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lintu47 Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure :happybounce:
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Hideous-and-Sexy Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I wish you understood how many people finished that final line and ached to reach out and hold you for a moment.
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