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wineglass waists by *ohsostarryeyed:iconohsostarryeyed:

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there are no doe-eyes
or wine-glass waists
here.
[if that's
what you're looking
for, look elsewhere.]

muscle twitches shake my
limbs and mock my cold,
white skin.

there are no full hearts
or pretty smiles here.
[if that's
what you're looking
for, don't look at
me.]

tremors twist up my spine
and falsely shy ribcage,
shivers threatening to
break bones and skin.

there are no steady fingers
or love-crammed veins here.
[if that's
what you're looking
for, save yourself.]
©2009 *ohsostarryeyed
:iconohsostarryeyed:

Author's Comments

self-perception.

alt. version: [link]

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~SmileforSomeone Mar 17, 2009, 11:32:02 AM
this is amazing.

i especially like your descriptions before the brackets.

--
The whole conviction of my life now rests upon the belief that loneliness, far from being a rare and curious phenomenon, is the central and inevitable fact of human exictence.

- Thomas Wolfe, "Gods Lonely Men"
:iconshep4life:
~shep4life Mar 17, 2009, 11:33:00 AM
interesting way of seeing things

--
"There is beauty in despair. You just have to know where to look." Me! ;)
:iconchibi-shuriken:
=Chibi-Shuriken Mar 17, 2009, 11:57:07 AM
Mm, interesting. I feel the same as you often.

But do you suppose others see us the same way? :heart:

--
The difference between intelligence and stupidity is that intelligence has a limit.

Check out my gallery and watch me, I'll watch you back! :highfive:

*Apophysis

Icon by =Neltruin :heart:
:iconfollowmebackhome:
~FollowMeBackHome Mar 17, 2009, 12:23:32 PM
wow, this is so incredibly beautiful.
as are you :heart:

--
a n d a l l i n t h e c o l d l i g h t o f m o r n i n g
:iconamertie:
~Amertie Mar 17, 2009, 12:46:54 PM
you're beautiful. :heart:
[believe it, now.]
:iconiampoetry:
~IAmPoetry Mar 17, 2009, 4:45:26 PM
Pretty good, although I find the brackets annoying and unnecessary extra words that go into too much detail, I try to look pass that but I am sure you have your purpose, it's just not my cup of tea.

This is what I mean and when I take out the brackets and extra words that drag the poem, is sounds so much better, to me nonetheless:

there are no doe-eyes
or wine-glass waists
here.

muscle twitches shake my
limbs and mock my cold,
white skin.

there are no full hearts
or pretty smiles here.

tremors twist up my spine
and falsely shy ribcage,
shivers threatening to
break bones and skin.

there are no steady fingers
or love-crammed veins here.

--
Poetry is truly boundless. It is my passion, I am the canvas.
--
my poetry, lemon
both bitter and tart
you decide the taste of my art

©iampoetry
ღ
:iconcookymonstah:
~cookymonstah Mar 17, 2009, 4:50:22 PM
amazing. :)
i have to agree with iampoetry though.

--
hugs and cookies. <3
:hug:
:iconlosingmyfaith:
*losingmyfaith Mar 17, 2009, 5:12:11 PM
i love it (and the brackets). good job (:

--
" ...he's more myself than I am. Whatever our souls are made of, his and mine are the same, and Linton's is as different as a moonbeam from lightning, or frost from fire."
:iconrainforest-primate:
~rainforest-primate Mar 17, 2009, 6:49:50 PM

i can't think of anything to say to this.

a mix of lovelovelove and not sure what else. whatever it is, it makes me sad. my intrapersonal is low. i am not intelligent in this. :ohnoesplz:




p.s.
if it's okay with you, i'd like to do another collab. if you agree, you start this time. :3


--

so you can't hold a star in your hand though
at least you can move on to that better plan
:iconhot-sauce-vixxen:
~Hot-Sauce-Vixxen Mar 17, 2009, 7:30:53 PM
This is amazingly beautiful, as are you. :hug:

--
...if you know what I mean.

TyZulaaaaaaaa. :heart::noes:

My icon was made my the incredibly awesome ~numbah3 ILU. :blowkiss:

Well slap me with a fish and call me grandma!
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