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you call me an angel
in spite of the bruises left on the fronts of my knees
stains of sin left on my skin;

the knots in my back,
you liken to the wings soon to burst from my shoulders
&tell me you can feel no sadness
when looking at my face-

eyes you analyse
into paints of the colour wheel,
several shades i have yet to see;
my smile,
despite its crooked nature
&peeling lips,
thinning enamel from my sickness-
you still find me amongst the heavens.

&sometimes,
as this once,
i kissed you to shut you up.

my skin is removing itself after my clothes
in the winter,
cold &dark,
too unlike the white night of russian summers.

i kissed you &it was wet because i was crying
&every time our lips parted
another sob stuttered its way through the gap.
you heard what words i couldn't swallow,
the ones straining to pass over my tongue
yet drowned upon existence.

you listen to me until i lose my headstrong aim
to starve back to bones,
to see the angel wings i've lost in my skin
you touch &feel are there;

you leave me warm
&wet in a cool bed beneath your window
as no one had managed before;

you lull me to sleep
with lips on my
forehead
cheek
nose
chin
&hold me lightly enough
that i can move
unrestrained
but when i do,
i only curl closer
to you.
i cannot believe i wrote this i cannot believe i wrote this i cannot believe myself
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:iconiceblueeyedgirl:
Iceblueeyedgirl Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, the feeling in this is just Amazingly Beautiful!!!! 
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kitsune-sama98 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
absolutely amazing, i dont think anyone ever could've done a better job at this
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
thank you so much, my love
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:iconthe-last-black-rose:
The-last-black-rose Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student Writer
sweetie.
sweetie.
SWEETIE.
Why do you always do this to me? <3 x
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
i hope it's a good thing!
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:iconthe-last-black-rose:
The-last-black-rose Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Student Writer
I'm not sure
I hope so
either way your poetry tells the story of my life and it scares me.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
thank you yet i'm sorry, it's confusing
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eyelashkiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
absolutely lovely!
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
thank you!
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BlueSteelEyes Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student General Artist
This is fantastically written. Smart and full of feeling
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
thank you :]
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
I love it :) You did well.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
thank you!!
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WhatIsFreedomToYou Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is beautiful!
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
thank you!
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:icondathedgexd:
DathedgexD Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
So well put together and so beautiful :) good job!
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
merci <3
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tirasunil Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student Writer
This is good! Metaphorical romanticism, I swear, the style these days. :)
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SinfulAnkh Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
...*sniffle* w,
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
:hug:
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:iconbreathinginthestars:
breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
that last line is so beautiful.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
thank you <3
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JakeJynx Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Professional Artisan Crafter
I don't know how to interpret this. At first, I thought it was sexual, with the "bruises on the knees" and "stains of sin." Then I started to think the narrator has an illness, with the mention of sickness. And then it went back to sexuality. I just don't even know.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
it's really just my life, haha. it is sexual, but i am a mess. i don't know either
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GoldenFlameNaLu Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
awesome!!!!
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
thanks!! :heart:
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GoldenFlameNaLu Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
ur wels!~ ^^
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sweetiekid Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This was very powerfull..and applies to my life very much so....and i m guessing you cant believe it because something intense inspired you to write it eh?;P dont be embarresed, its beautiful
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
haha thank you :P
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Haseo-Ani-Waya Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Forgive me if this comes across as brash; sometimes we need someoneone willing to lift us up and praise our best when we're only willing to dwell on the worst. I'm not sure if that'll help, but I thought I might as well mention it.
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
it's a complicated situation, so i'm hesitant to take that to heart and act upon it. thank you, though
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Haseo-Ani-Waya Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
By all means, I
m just a voice in the 'Net at the moment. I just know someone whose gone through the same thing and thought I might lend a hand ta help.
And you're welcome.
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GreyEyes20 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is great!
You should have more confidence! :)
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
haha thank you :P
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mouseluva Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student General Artist
too perfect i seriously cant usually i try really hard to leave eloquent and poetic and interesting comments for you but i just cant too perf hrnk
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
ahh i know you are, thank you so much :]
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mouseluva Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student General Artist
hrrnkk
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wongy06 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
You are just... BLEGH! No words can describe it... Phantasmagorically stupendous!
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
you are so lovely to me :hug:
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:iconwongy06:
wongy06 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
Much less so than you deserve but as much as I can alone. :)
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I would give a lot to feel any of the emotions you convey through this poem.

"i kissed you &it was wet because i was crying
&every time our lips parted
another sob stuttered its way through the gap."

God, I love this part. It's awful and raw, beautiful and alive. I felt it.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
blehhh please take the emotions away! haha it only conflicts me! but thank you :]
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hehe, I wish I could :P but still, I'd rather feel s o m e t h i n g, something solid, than wandering about in so-so emotions, feeling meybe a little bit of this, a little bit of that, and in generel being confused about everything. When you've been in a great relationship for four years and suddenly having to adapt to being single..it just turns everything upside down and inside out. And it makes you miss all the feelings you experience in a relationship.
Long-ass comment aside, you're welcome. ^^
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LillithOssgoodSorrow Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow this is so breath taking, even your description... it is amazing.
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
thank you <3
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:iconwingz69:
WiNGz69 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Student Writer
That's very sweet. Lovely poem :)
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
merci!
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